Post by jacob danvers . on Aug 31, 2008 16:26:13 GMT -5
Hey Jenna,
I read it all and here's what I've to say about it:
roleplaying ;
friends ;
I read it all and here's what I've to say about it:
roleplaying ;
Please don't beat yourself up like that, of all the people I've seen rp, I'd have to say that you're probably one of the most consistent posters, meaning that your word count is pretty much always around the same length. While this sometimes can be a bad thing, your posts are generally 1k+! I pointed out several things while accepting Bailey's app, and I hope you didn't take it the wrong way, I didn't mean to be rude or anything when commenting, I was trying to be critique-y, to help you improve etc. The main thing for me, when reading your posts, are the commas, or lack thereof. I'm not sure what everyone else thinks, but commas make reading easier, they separate sentences giving the reader a chance to breathe. Commas are the main problem for me, being a punctuation & grammar nut of sorts, I seem to subconsciously focus in on the lack of them, distracting me from reading your post. They can make a world's of difference, honestly, here's an example of how much of a difference they can make:
a) I ate, Grandpa.
b) I ate Grandpa.
Did you eat your grandpa, or are you telling him that you ate? They're both correct sentences, but they hold two entirely different meanings.
Hopefully that makes sense . . . =]
friends ;
As for this section, I cannot say very much because I haven't witnessed anyone jumping after you. But something that might be the problem is how you word things - just because you mean something doesn't mean that it's going to come out like that, especially if it's over the internet. People often misinterpret meanings to begin with and it happens more often on the internet because there is no tone of voice or body language accompanying it.